Falling Foerver.

by Ebony (12 years)

I regained my senses, to realize I was lying on cold, cracked gravel. My head hurt even more than it had during the fall, and so I massaged my temples in an attempt to soothe the pain a little. I gave a cry of pain when another pain shot up my arm. What was going on here? And where was I?

My legs were frozen. I couldn't move anything except my neck, though that made my muscles ache. I suddenly felt weaker than I had ever done before, as though I meant nothing...

It was then that my eyes adjusted to the darkness. I seemed to be in a huge cave, deep underground, with a dim light in the corner that came from an unknown source. This wasn't right. I had only fallen into a small hole, not a bottomless pit. And, as I checked, no blood surrounded me, like it would have done. Something wasn't right. I knew it.

The wall in front of me had some markings engraved onto it, and the odd thing, was I recognized them instantly. Reading in my head, I made out the words:


Those words made a shiver go up my back. Who did it mean? I had a nasty feeling I knew who...but it was just to awful to think about. I had never felt so scared in my life.

The light in the corner flickered a little. It was the first time I actually turned my eyes to look at it. The light gave a small sob, before turning to...look at me. It was a small child. Although a fairly golden glow emitted from the boy's face, he had a look on his face of such sadness, I felt my heart break inside. Tears ran down my cheeks, as I desperately tried to reach out to him, but he just turned away. As though ashamed. At this point, I began crying. Very hard. "Where am I? Why are we here?" I pleaded. But he didn't answer. And he never would. All I had of him was the cloudy look in his tearful eyes. A look that begged for help.

I sniffed, and looked back up at the ceiling of the cave. Blackness stared down at me. This place was awful. It didn't deserve to exist. It had broken me, emotionally, mentally, and physically. It had broken the small boy.
It was the place where people fell forever.

The church bells chimed gloomily. The clouds circled overhead. And the new addition to the graveyard lay forgotten in the shadows by all. Or, at least, by most. One lonely person sat cross-legged in front of the stone, a tear rolling down his cheek. The five-year-old boy stroked the stone tenderly, before standing up, throwing the roses on the grave, and whispering the awful, lonely words,

"Goodbye forever."

Comments for Falling Foerver.

Average Rating starstarstarstar

Click here to add your own comments

May 06, 2013
by: Cody Edgemon

very nice story i like how you set the mood for the story by luring people in it is a very nice piece it made my day :)

Click here to add your own comments

Join in and write your own page! It's easy to do. How? Simply click here to return to Free Creative Writing Prompts #1.

Enjoy this page? Please pay it forward. Here's how...

Would you prefer to share this page with others by linking to it?

  1. Click on the HTML link code below.
  2. Copy and paste it, adding a note of your own, into your blog, a Web page, forums, a blog comment, your Facebook account, or anywhere that someone would find this page valuable.

Write a Story Based on These Prompts or This Article!

Use the above prompts or article as inspiration to write a story or other short piece.

[ ? ]

Upload 1-4 Pictures or Graphics (optional)[ ? ]


Click here to upload more images (optional)

Author Information (optional)

To receive credit as the author, enter your information below.

(first or full name)

(e.g., City, State, Country)

Submit Your Contribution

  •  submission guidelines.

(You can preview and edit on the next page)

What Other Visitors Have Said

Click below to see contributions from other visitors to this page...

My favourite childhood toy Not rated yet
When i was only five years old.i have a beautiful car.it has red and white colour.i ride it outside my house. i liked it very much ,one day i was in my …

There is no life without moves Not rated yet
I think movies and TV is an essential part of my life and it is hard to imagine life without movies, on one hand movies are a great source of entertainment …

Click here to write your own.